Okay, I'm back, because hey, I have more to say. :)
I would like to point out that before this? Only one person, one writer, could make me like Bert, because I have such problems with him as a person that they're pretty tough to get past. But here, oh. I maybe smiled the whole time he and Lindsey were making cocktails. Um.
And Lindsey! Well, you already know how I feel about her, but while we're talking about the cocktail scene, Ann too. Especially in that scene. Their relationship as sisters, and that last moment, so fragile and jagged, and we're left not knowing if everything's been broken between them, or. Not.
Ohhh, the Bob/Brian (see, I told Tora that I blamed you two for my awakening to this pairing, but seriously, how did I miss it?) and Jimmy/Chantal. ♥___♥ And he wasn't even there for most of it.
Actually, that's something I need to mention. The way everyone had someone they loved in there, even just a friend, but friends are so important here - and you never knew till you knew, till they told you, till Brian broke apart, till Chantal let herself slip, for just a moment, before she had to be all tight, all business and rebellion again. Amanda, for example - she had two, and you would never have known, and I love that. I love how they've all been functioning, in their own way, by either closing down or breaking off in bits, until they're edged and jagged with it, because they know they have to do this, have to keep going, because they would want them to, because it's the only way to get them back.
I feel like there is so much more to be said about this world - which, I guess, I know, but what I mean is, the storytelling, you can tell. As I was told in one of my film classes, the plot (the events which occur within the film, or in this case, fic [am only using this word to avoid confusion later]) is over, finished, but the story (the events which occur beyond the film, or fic) is still going. I want to dive back in, I want to see everything about it. I want - would like, please don't take this as a demand, I'm not that rude >.<- everything about Bob and Brian, about Jimmy and Chantal - everything about the world, all the stories going on outside of this group, like the Chicago side, and how they're so...electric, I guess, and how they're coping without Pete - because he's Pete Wentz, and of course everyone knew him, but he was theirs, it's going to have killed part of them too, and I want to see how they keep going, what they use individually, and together, to make themselves carry on.
And again while on the subject, I agree with Mik, it is incredibly brave to start with something so brutal, to people we already know, have images and associations of. I think it's part of the hook at the beginning that I experienced, and an apt summary and induction to the world - there are knife blades glinting in those dark corners I mentioned, and some of the fire is authorised gunshot. It's not pretty; it's brutal and hard and gritty and you'll be lucky if you don't at least break a few bones.
God, I should shut up, but seriously. I could wax lyrical about this for years and years to come. I know you did more on Alicia, but I would still love to see more on her still, just, even on the periphery (because Alicia could never be background). I just, all of it, darling. Everything you have to give, I'll happily take.
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I would like to point out that before this? Only one person, one writer, could make me like Bert, because I have such problems with him as a person that they're pretty tough to get past. But here, oh. I maybe smiled the whole time he and Lindsey were making cocktails. Um.
And Lindsey! Well, you already know how I feel about her, but while we're talking about the cocktail scene, Ann too. Especially in that scene. Their relationship as sisters, and that last moment, so fragile and jagged, and we're left not knowing if everything's been broken between them, or. Not.
Ohhh, the Bob/Brian (see, I told Tora that I blamed you two for my awakening to this pairing, but seriously, how did I miss it?) and Jimmy/Chantal. ♥___♥ And he wasn't even there for most of it.
Actually, that's something I need to mention. The way everyone had someone they loved in there, even just a friend, but friends are so important here - and you never knew till you knew, till they told you, till Brian broke apart, till Chantal let herself slip, for just a moment, before she had to be all tight, all business and rebellion again. Amanda, for example - she had two, and you would never have known, and I love that. I love how they've all been functioning, in their own way, by either closing down or breaking off in bits, until they're edged and jagged with it, because they know they have to do this, have to keep going, because they would want them to, because it's the only way to get them back.
I feel like there is so much more to be said about this world - which, I guess, I know, but what I mean is, the storytelling, you can tell. As I was told in one of my film classes, the plot (the events which occur within the film, or in this case, fic [am only using this word to avoid confusion later]) is over, finished, but the story (the events which occur beyond the film, or fic) is still going. I want to dive back in, I want to see everything about it. I want - would like, please don't take this as a demand, I'm not that rude >.<- everything about Bob and Brian, about Jimmy and Chantal - everything about the world, all the stories going on outside of this group, like the Chicago side, and how they're so...electric, I guess, and how they're coping without Pete - because he's Pete Wentz, and of course everyone knew him, but he was theirs, it's going to have killed part of them too, and I want to see how they keep going, what they use individually, and together, to make themselves carry on.
And again while on the subject, I agree with Mik, it is incredibly brave to start with something so brutal, to people we already know, have images and associations of. I think it's part of the hook at the beginning that I experienced, and an apt summary and induction to the world - there are knife blades glinting in those dark corners I mentioned, and some of the fire is authorised gunshot. It's not pretty; it's brutal and hard and gritty and you'll be lucky if you don't at least break a few bones.
God, I should shut up, but seriously. I could wax lyrical about this for years and years to come. I know you did more on Alicia, but I would still love to see more on her still, just, even on the periphery (because Alicia could never be background). I just, all of it, darling. Everything you have to give, I'll happily take.